open your eyes

I don't really see the problem with it. Technically there's no such thing as perfection anyways but if there was then it'd be perfect (obviously), so without error, anything without error cannot be good, nothing can be against it because it is perfect. Another thing about this shot is that you can see the flash reflecting off. Appart from that, the way you've put your idea down is good, what with the messyness of it all!

Hope I've helped.